BBC 7 Sketch Show - Redrafting

I'm in a mull with some old sketches I want to send to the BBC7 Script call. I'm thinking of redoing this one 'The Sperm.' I wrote it a while ago for TV. It has some neat visual stuff and is very silly.

S/FX - KNOCKING ON A DOOR.

WENDY: Hello.

WILL: Let me in.

WENDY: What?

WILL: Let me in. I’m a sperm and it’s my job.

WENDY: Have you got any ID?

WILL: I’m a sperm not a Meter Reader. Let me in

WENDY: Is this a joke?

S/FX RUNNING ON THE SPOT

WILL: Survival of the fittest is never a joke.*

Don't quite understand why no one else likes it. Still these and some others will be edited down this week and sent off in hope. Have a look at the link for some examples of other sketches.



*A full version is available on request.